The Zen Clan

The Zen lack in elemental jutsu right? so im curiouse on how it works unless im missing something. if the ninja is an A rank jounin, they can only access B rank elemental? like one rank lower than their normal rank? or are ALL Zen clan limited to B rank elemental jutsu period, no matter what rank they are? just wondering


Name: Sword Dance: Ultimate Dash
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Sub-Class: Kenjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: Short - Long
Charge Time: 2 posts
Duration: 1 post
Chakra Use: Massive
Description: After charging the necessary chakra, Kanji dashes at the enemy and for a split second his speed doubles for a single powerful slash at an enemy.

(soooooom what is the Zen member doing while charing? are they immobile?)


Name: Sword Dance: Mountain King's Dance
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Sub-Class: Kenjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: Short
Charge Time: 1 post
Duration: 2 posts
Chakra Use: Massive
Description: The actual movements vary but, the gist of what happens is Kanji creats 4 bunshin clones and a single kage bunshin clone and then attacks the enemy with his sword infused with so much chakra there is more chakra in and on the blade than actual metal.

(not sure why there are clones, a distraction maybe? this can be an A rank tech if the clones dont serve a major purpose)

Name: Fight Them With Your Rock
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Sub-Class: Ninjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: Short - Long
Charge Time: Instant
Duration: 3 posts
Chakra Use: Almost all
Description: Named after one of Kanji's favorite songs. Kanji goes into a frenzy by using up almost all of his chakra at once to attack the enemy. +25 to all physical stats. He's unconcious after this is used.

(no spaming this attack, giving all that stat point increase is WAT intense...maybe make it 15 or 20...25 to ALL physical stats is just insane.)

I like this clan, i may make one eventually ^^

i dont know, maybe make it two ranks below. because than a kage leveled Zen has access to kage leveled jutsu, witch doesn't seem all that limiting. at least in my opinion. The main focus IS chakra control rather than elements is it not?

Sword Dance: Ultimate Dash/Sword Dance: Mountain King's Dance--Yea, ok, merely state that in the attacks if you haven't already.

your last attack, still seems too strong. you already have a jutsu that supposedly increases all physical stats +10. i would definetely make this +15 rather than 25. at least....



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Name: Cutting Wave Slash
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Sub-Class: Kenjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: Short to Long
Charge Time: None
Duration: 1 post
Chakra Use: Small
Description: Sends a razor thin wave of highly controlled and compressed chakra forward as the user swings their weapon. The wave is very, very, VERY sharp. If used at incredibly close range, the wave of chakra acts as a second blade.

--what can it cut through, other B rank attacks?


Name: Sword Dance: Gale Stab
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Sub-Class: Kenjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: Medium
Charge Time: Instant
Duration: 1 post
Chakra Use: Small
Description: The user lunges forward and skims across the ground with chakra. The lunge is very fast because the chakra enhances the user's speed greatly.

--is it faster or equally as fast as a body flicker, i think adding some kind of comparrison to the flicker may give a moer detailed description.


Name: Sword Dance: Violent Sword
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Sub-Class: Kenjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: Medium - Long
Charge Time: Instant
Duration: Instant
Chakra Use: Small - Large
Description: Places chakra at any point on a sword to make it sharper. Because of the Zen Clan's chakra Control, the chakra can be compressed to rediculously high levels.

--so this is like Asuma's swallow attack thingy, or are there any added affects?

Name: Chakra Spike
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Sub-Class: Fuuinjutsu
Element: Discipline
Range: N/A
Charge Time: Instant
Duration: 3 posts
Chakra Use: Half of Maximum Chakra
Description: Kanji releases a seal he keeps on some of his chakra and causes it to all activate at once, granting effects similar to the 8 gates. Gives +10 to all Physical Stats.

--This totally passed my eye last time, +10 for every stat and its only A rank? i dont think thats really fair, should be S or something. +10 is alot to be dispursed to EVERY physical stat, unless you add some kind of downfall to the attack as well like -10 or 20 to another stat in order to make it A. so i would say this is an S rank for what it is, A if you want to add a draw back stat release.

Alrighty than, sounds good to me. though i would think about limiting A rank elemental jutsu when one reaches that high rank. (again, just a suggestion) Other than that though, everything looks nice and clean, good job and thank you for dealign with my amatuer mod crap ^^.

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